Week 4

For our 4th meeting, the girls printed their blog entries for Suzanne and she went over each of them.
For Maya Suzanne began with her Q & A's from Doris and gave the following suggestions:

• Divide the questions into 3 categories: 1 Doris the dancer, 2 Doris the person, 3 Info on the upcoming performances
• Ask some follow up questions about Doris' position at Recreo, get her position, title, correct name spelling
• Read thru the questions and notice the rhythm - not making each too long so the reader has "breathing room"
• make note of the questions Maya would be willing to have edited out if there's not enough room
• Deadline is this coming Wed. for the piece
• Send me a draft first on Mon for review and I will return to her by Tues.
• Include photos
  
• Make a post on blog site

For Melissa piece on the tarantula, Suzanne's comments were:

• Divide in 3 parts: 1 set the scene, 2 the surprise, 3 the ending
• Give more information on Kirby, why you're there, what you're doing, what you're hungry for...showing, not telling
• Possibly tie in jungle island thoughts from Lost after seeing the tarantula
• work on ending - tying it up
• Blog your updates
  

For Kirby's piece on the goat, Suzanne's comments were:

• Set the scene more, i.e. what kind of school, more description
• what were kids doing at lunch, soccer, activities, etc.
• what does the area around the school look like
• what did kids do when goat wondered into the school yard
• describe the goat, his leash, etc. and what he did in the classroom
  
• give kids responses in Spanish
• give teacher's response
  
• what the goat's owner did
• Blog your updates
  

For Maya's piece on the scooter, Suzanne overall like it - wanted her to make some minor corrections and check spelling. She wants this piece sent in on Sunday to go into the paper with another scooter article that's been written.

Kirby and Melissa need to put their Q&A's up on the blog

Good job girls!